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Genre: Horror
Photo Copyright Beth Carter
When you hitch, you catch rides with weirdos. But when you’re standing in the rain on the side of some lonely highway at midnight and a car stops, you get in. I could see it was some kind of cobbled together homemade jalopy, but it roared off down the dark road at high speed. The driver said nothing, and a black hoodie obscured his face. Faster and faster we flew through the storm, 100, 120, 140, 160. At 200, the hooded man began to laugh evilly. He threw his head back and cackled and the lightning flashed off bare bone.
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Good story, Ron, with an unexpected and dastardly ending. I’d like to say that would cure the narrator of hitching but I doubt he’ll have the chance to give it up.
janet
Oh-oh! A wonderful opening to a dark story. I want to know more!
Oh oh!
Scott
Oh Hell, Ron… good scare!
I dunno, if the Devil wears Prada I wouldn’t expect to find him in that car. But maybe that’s what makes him the Devil I’ll never hitchhike!
what a scary thought! a ghost with a dangerous sense of humour..
What a great movie opening..! 😉
Ron, this is wicked! I was spooked. I liked how you called it a homemade jalopy. That’s perfect.
Jalopy is the first word that came to mind when I saw that picture too. 🙂 Scary stuff here…eeee 😯 !
I’d never hitchhike myself. Never. Its like throwing your life away…Too dangerous.
Very scary … I could just imagine the scene. Well done,
For some reason you gave me a real laugh…is this the work of the devil awakening our dark side I wonder!?
That’s great. I like the feeling of dawning horror as the car goes faster and faster and then he starts to laugh…
So the Reaper drives a homemade jalopy? I’d have thought he’d go for something more flashy. Great story, really enjoyed it 🙂
At 200 mph he doesn’t have many options. Creepy scary goodness here, Ron.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Excellent, creepy story. I can picture the scene beautifully.
Fresh take on the picture. Good job, Ron!
Nice…!
Bwahaha!
The devil,the proverbial dark and stormy night, and 200 mph…what more do you need for a good horror story..
Yowza. Great job with this prompt. You had my heart racing with the high speeds, then bam.
Still shivering. A classic tale of horror, but a fresh twist. Good job.
Here’s mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/eye-of-the-beholder/
I get flashes from a modern version of the seventh seal. If there was chessboard there somewhere we could make. Bergman roadmovie. Great 🙂
I like the way the narrative itself accelerates and propels the reader . . . powerful.
Great climatic story and explosive ending.
Great terror scene. Really chilling
Am I allowed to say that this is not your best work? However, I myself have not got my flash fiction skills honed since my return, so my best work has not shown up yet. On the other hand, the idea of that rig actually driving at 200 miles per hour is kind of funny…
Hi Linda,
Very honest and you’re right. They can’t all be winners. Ron
I really like the last line in this piece. The only thing I might do differently is take out that first ‘and’ and replace it with a comma. I just reads a little smoother. Great, great line.
Now I know why I don’t hitchhike. Especially at night, 😉 great read. 🙂
i’m thinking this is being told from beyond the grave. well done.
Ah, thumbing a ride with the Reaper. That reminds me, I need to get over to Bill’s site.
Really enjoyed this drive with death.
I love speed, but that’s a bit too fast even for me! Great story Ron with a good ending.
Dee